{"id":885,"date":"2009-09-11T16:45:33","date_gmt":"2009-09-11T21:45:33","guid":{"rendered":"http:\/\/www.davehitt.com\/blog2\/?p=885"},"modified":"2014-03-25T13:27:38","modified_gmt":"2014-03-25T18:27:38","slug":"writing-%e2%80%93-getting-the-details-right","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"http:\/\/www.davehitt.com\/blog2\/writing-%e2%80%93-getting-the-details-right\/","title":{"rendered":"Writing \u00e2\u20ac\u201c Getting the Details Right"},"content":{"rendered":"

Jefferson picked up the intact motorcycle and examined it in the moonlight.\u00c2\u00a0 “This is great!\u00c2\u00a0 I wonder where that dirtball got a hold of this beauty.\u00c2\u00a0 Check this out, Catherine, it’s a 1957 Harley 74 Panhead with a Fat Bob gas tank.\u00c2\u00a0 What a great crotch rocket.” <\/em><\/p>\n

TNT’s show “Leverage” features some great characters and plots so implausible they border on goofy.\u00c2\u00a0 I watch it for the characters, but it’s annoying me more and more.\u00c2\u00a0 In every recent episode they make obvious mistakes any competent writer should have caught before the script’s second draft.<\/p>\n

In one episode they were trying to get into a room protected by a security lock.\u00c2\u00a0 They used a thumbprint they’d stolen from someone who had access.\u00c2\u00a0 When that didn’t work Alex, the security expert, said something about capacitance checking, and used a Gummy Frog to fool the system.\u00c2\u00a0 I have no idea if that would work in the real world, but it worked for them.\u00c2\u00a0 But then the system asked for an iris scan.\u00c2\u00a0 They left, kidnapped the guy they were impersonating in the silliest way possible, brought him to the lock, got their iris scan and got in.<\/p>\n

I’ve worked in secure facilities.\u00c2\u00a0 If your access fails the security guys will be there very quickly.\u00c2\u00a0 In one case a colleague tried his pass on a server room he wasn’t authorized to access.\u00c2\u00a0 He swiped his card once<\/em>.\u00c2\u00a0 Security was there within minutes, and warned him if he tried it again he’d be fired immediately.<\/p>\n

The plot of this episode involved a food company who was knowingly selling tainted food.\u00c2\u00a0 (A rather dumb premise to begin with.\u00c2\u00a0 No large company would do that \u00e2\u20ac\u201c it would destroy their business.) The good guys were trying to steal incriminating files at the same time the bad guys were deleting them.\u00c2\u00a0 The good guys failed, which is realistic; deleting files takes much less time than finding and downloading them.\u00c2\u00a0 But the trick ending was stupid.<\/p>\n

Nathan Ford, the head good guy, announced that although they failed to get the incriminating files, they had stolen all the company’s patents, and would release them to the public unless the company came clean.<\/p>\n

No!<\/em> Patents are already public.\u00c2\u00a0 Anyone can get all the details of any patent for a small fee.\u00c2\u00a0 Food companies don’t patent unique recipes or processes because their competitors would have easy access to them.\u00c2\u00a0 The recipes for Coke and KFC, for instance, are protected by keeping them secret.\u00c2\u00a0 If Ford had said “I’ve stolen your secret <\/em>recipes” it would have worked.\u00c2\u00a0 For anyone with even the most cursory familiarity with patents, the ending was downright stupid.<\/p>\n

I could write another thousand words about the stupid, obvious errors in just the past few episodes, but you get the idea.<\/p>\n

Just because you’re writing fiction doesn’t mean you can just make stuff up.\u00c2\u00a0 If you don’t get your facts straight you’re going to alienate any readers who spot the error.<\/p>\n

Getting It Right <\/strong><\/p>\n

Getting the details right has the opposite effect.\u00c2\u00a0 It gives your story credibility among the readers who know the subject and makes it more interesting for those who don’t.<\/p>\n

A while back I was reading all the John MacDonald novels I could get my hands on.\u00c2\u00a0 In one of them the main character, Travis McGee, visits Utica.\u00c2\u00a0 The descriptions of various parts of the city were accurate to the smallest detail.\u00c2\u00a0 People who had never been in Utica wouldn’t know that, but I’ve been there and it made the story real.\u00c2\u00a0 It not only made that scene more enjoyable, it also made me trust the author.\u00c2\u00a0 When he described a place I wasn’t familiar with it rang true.<\/p>\n

Even tiny details matter.\u00c2\u00a0 In show “Sons of Anarchy” Clay, the leader of the motorcycle gang, smokes cigars.\u00c2\u00a0 In the last episode a character hands him a box of cigars and says, “I heard you like Camachos.”\u00c2\u00a0 Perfect.\u00c2\u00a0 Comanchos are very strong cigars that would appeal to someone like Clay.\u00c2\u00a0 If the line had been “I heard you like Macanudos,” it would have been stupid.\u00c2\u00a0 Macanudos, America’s best selling brand, are smooth and mild.\u00c2\u00a0 A lazy writer who just Googled “popular cigars” could have easily made that mistake and most viewers wouldn’t have noticed it, but it would have ruined the scene for cigar smokers. Instead of being drawn into the intense, dramatic scene they would have been snickering at the mistake.<\/p>\n

When I wrote Blood Witness<\/a> the internet wasn’t available.\u00c2\u00a0 I was in a writers group in the online service GEnie.\u00c2\u00a0 In one scene two vampires, Catherine and Jefferson, kill three bikers they’d bated into harassing them.\u00c2\u00a0 Jefferson was a motorcycle aficionado.\u00c2\u00a0 I wasn’t.\u00c2\u00a0 I needed a description of a bike that would both excite a collector and be something a gang member would ride.\u00c2\u00a0 I asked for help, and the advice resulted in the opening sentence of this article.\u00c2\u00a0\u00c2\u00a0 If you know motorcycles, it rings true.\u00c2\u00a0 If you don’t it still adds to the scene and gives you some insight to Jefferson’s character.<\/p>\n

I’m working on my next novel, a detective story.\u00c2\u00a0 Some scenes involve gun battles.\u00c2\u00a0 I used online references for the first draft, but for the second one I’ll send those scenes to someone who really knows firearms and ask for their input.\u00c2\u00a0 On the other hand I won’t need any help describing the cigars one of the characters smokes, or the experience he has in a tobacconist’s lounge.<\/p>\n

Getting the facts wrong is easy and lazy.\u00c2\u00a0 While most of your readers might not catch the mistake, those who do will be snapped out of the reality you’ve created and will lose respect for your writing ability.\u00c2\u00a0 Getting the facts right can take considerably more work, but it makes your fiction sparkle with authenticity.<\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"

Jefferson picked up the intact motorcycle and examined it in the moonlight.\u00c2\u00a0 “This is great!\u00c2\u00a0 I wonder where that dirtball got a hold of this beauty.\u00c2\u00a0 Check this out, Catherine, it’s a 1957 Harley 74 Panhead with a Fat Bob gas tank.\u00c2\u00a0 What a great crotch rocket.” TNT’s show “Leverage” features some great characters and […]<\/p>\n","protected":false},"author":1,"featured_media":0,"comment_status":"open","ping_status":"open","sticky":false,"template":"","format":"standard","meta":[],"categories":[10,63],"tags":[],"_links":{"self":[{"href":"http:\/\/www.davehitt.com\/blog2\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/885"}],"collection":[{"href":"http:\/\/www.davehitt.com\/blog2\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts"}],"about":[{"href":"http:\/\/www.davehitt.com\/blog2\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/types\/post"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"http:\/\/www.davehitt.com\/blog2\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/users\/1"}],"replies":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"http:\/\/www.davehitt.com\/blog2\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/comments?post=885"}],"version-history":[{"count":3,"href":"http:\/\/www.davehitt.com\/blog2\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/885\/revisions"}],"predecessor-version":[{"id":1995,"href":"http:\/\/www.davehitt.com\/blog2\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/885\/revisions\/1995"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"http:\/\/www.davehitt.com\/blog2\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/media?parent=885"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"category","embeddable":true,"href":"http:\/\/www.davehitt.com\/blog2\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/categories?post=885"},{"taxonomy":"post_tag","embeddable":true,"href":"http:\/\/www.davehitt.com\/blog2\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/tags?post=885"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}